Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrates the two French speaking scenarios where regional language were spoken to adults and those adults who spoke regional language to their own pupils.

Overall, the chart compares number of adults whose parents spoke French regional language and those adutls who speak regional language to theri own children which shows that occitan was mostly spoken occasionally by parents while alsatian was most spoken by adults to their own children.

The number of adults whose parents spoke regional French language, divides into those who have spoken habitually and occasionally wjere both the Alsatian and Occitan were spoken habitually by 600 parents to adults. The least number of people who spoken Corsian was about 200. The parents who spoke regional language oc

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the two comparisons and give an overview, noting that Occitan was most often spoken occasionally and that Alsatian leads in speaking to children. However, the report is incomplete and several figures are inaccurate: you say Alsatian and Occitan were both spoken habitually by 600, whereas Occitan is about 620; you also describe Corsican as the least number at about 200, although its figures are about 85 habitually and 105 occasionally. The response ends mid-sentence and omits most comparisons, including the figures for adults speaking to their children. The required minimum of 150 words is not met, which contributes to the limited coverage. Include a complete account of the main patterns and accurate supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph beginning to describe the first chart. The overview also signals a useful comparison between the two measures. However, progression is limited because the body paragraph does not develop the information and stops abruptly at “The parents who spoke regional language oc”. As a result, the second chart is not discussed in a separate, complete section, and the reader cannot follow a full comparison. Linking is also repetitive, particularly through repeated use of “and” and “which”. Organise the report into a complete overview followed by clearly grouped details for both charts, using concise links such as “by contrast” and “whereas” where they clarify comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “habitually”, “occasionally”, “regional language” and “compares”, so the topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is narrow and several expressions are imprecise or awkward, such as “two French speaking scenarios”, “spoken to adults” and “most spoken by adults”. These choices make some relationships in the data unclear. There are also spelling errors, including “adutls”, “theri”, “wjere” and “Corsian”, which reduce accuracy. Aim for precise chart-reporting phrases such as “adults whose parents spoke the language to them” and “adults who pass the language on to their children”. Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating the same broad terms when a more exact expression is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few longer structures, including the overview clause beginning “which shows that”, and use simple past forms to describe the data. However, sentence structures are limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some relationships difficult to understand. For example, “regional language were spoken” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “the chart compares number” is missing an article. The sentence “The number of adults … divides into those who have spoken habitually and occasionally” has an unclear construction and inconsistent tense. The final sentence is incomplete, so it does not communicate a finished idea. Practise accurate plural and article use, and build clear comparison sentences with a subject and verb for each chart category.

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