Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart below illustrates the number of french adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them. When they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

According to graph some people spoke habitually and some spoke occasionally.

Occitan language is higher in number than other languages with 1m the highest point.

On the other hand Alsatian is one of the language which spoken habitually by 600 people and it has second highest number in a column. Breton which spoken occasionally has the third place in the cloumn. It is spoken by 1000 of person. Creole is the forth place. At the end Cosican it has the lowest rank in the data becuase it was spoken by very less people. Less than 100 people spoke it habitually and 100 of people spoke it occasionally.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s general subject and notes that Occitan has the largest figures, but it does not adequately report the two sets of information. It omits the figures for adults who speak each language to their own children and gives several inaccurate comparisons: Breton’s occasional figure is about 400, not 1,000, and Corsican’s occasional figure is about 105, not 100 exactly. The claim that Occitan reaches 1m also overlooks its habitual figure of about 620. There is no clear overview of the main pattern across both charts. The response is also 39 words below the 150-word minimum, limiting the detail needed to fulfil the task. Include a concise overview and accurate comparisons from both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence from introducing the chart to describing individual languages, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “At the end” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the response has no clear paragraph structure or overall progression, and the comparisons are difficult to follow because the two chart measures are not consistently distinguished. The opening is split into an incomplete sentence, while the later points move between languages without a clear organising principle. Grouping the information into an introduction, an overview, and one or two paragraphs comparing the figures would make the report easier to follow. Use linking expressions to show meaningful contrasts rather than simply marking the next item.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “highest,” and “lowest,” so the reader can understand the general topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “higher in number,” “second highest number in a column,” and “very less people.” There are also spelling errors in “cloumn,” “becuase,” “Cosican,” and “forth,” which reduce precision. Use standard data-reporting language such as “the largest figure,” “ranked second,” and “fewer than,” and check spelling carefully. More varied terms for comparing quantities would help express the chart information clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple statements and a relative clause, for example, “Alsatian is one of the language which spoken habitually by 600 people.” However, the clause is not grammatically complete, and errors in sentence formation occur often enough to make parts of the report awkward. The opening contains a sentence fragment after “When they were children,” and phrases such as “Breton which spoken occasionally” omit the verb “is.” There are also problems with articles, number agreement, and sentence boundaries. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use structures such as “Breton, which was spoken occasionally by about 400,000 adults, …”.

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