Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The charts below illustrstes the number of french adult whose parents spoke a french regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a french regional language to their children.

Overall, alsatian and occitan are the most regular languages spoke by french parents with over 600 thousands regional language spoken to them when their young, followed by breton with over 250 thousands. While creole and corsican are just 100 thousand and 90 thousands. However occ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the broad subject and gives a partial overview, noting that Alsatian and Occitan are among the most common languages spoken to adults in childhood, while Creole and Corsican are less common. However, it does not report the second chart’s figures or make the key comparison between childhood exposure and adults speaking these languages to their own children. The final phrase, “However occ”, is unfinished, so the overview and comparisons are incomplete. The response also contains only 55 words, below the required 150; 24 words copied from the prompt are excluded from that count. To improve, complete the report and include selected, accurate figures from both charts, especially the substantial decline in transmission to children.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence introduces the charts, followed by a paragraph beginning “Overall” that presents some broad comparisons. The linking words “followed by” and “However” also show an effort to connect ideas. However, the response ends abruptly at “However occ”, leaving the final point unfinished, and it has no developed body paragraphs or clear progression through the two charts. As a result, the reader cannot follow a complete account of the data. Build a simple structure with an introduction, an overview, and one or two paragraphs comparing the figures; use linking expressions only where they clarify the relationship between points.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “number,” “over,” “followed by,” and “Overall,” and the language topic is generally understandable. However, the range is narrow and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or awkward, such as “most regular languages,” “languages spoke by french parents,” and “when their young.” “Regular” does not clearly express frequency here, and “spoke” is not the appropriate form in “languages spoke by.” Spelling and capitalisation also need attention in “illustrstes,” “french,” “alsatian,” and “occ.” Use precise chart language such as “most commonly spoken,” “spoken to them during childhood,” and “approximately,” and check spelling and proper nouns before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a longer sentence with a comparison, using “followed by” and “while,” and its opening sentence communicates the general topic. However, grammatical control is inconsistent: “The charts below illustrstes” has subject–verb and verb-form problems, while “the number of french adult” and “when their young” show errors in number and sentence construction. The overview also shifts into an incomplete clause at “However occ,” so the final relationship is not expressed as a complete sentence. Most of the response relies on simple structures, with little evidence of controlled variety. Practise complete sentences with accurate agreement and plural forms, for example: “Occitan was spoken occasionally to about 1.065 million adults.”

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