Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The chart below indicates the number of French adults parents who spoke a French language to them when they were juvenile , as well as regional language to their own child.
Overall, it is clear that alsatian and occation were recorded highest for spoken habitually. where as Occasionally ratio for Occitan were almost double compared to habitually.
To starts with, approximately 600,000 Alsatian and Occitan parents spoke regional language habitually to citizens in their childhood. While for Alsatian these number turned to lower than half for occasionally people ( 250 ). Moreover Occcitan showed almost double growth. Lastly ratio of creole and corsican were almost similar for both scenarios.
In addition, Alsatian parents part who speak language to their own child were 3 times of Breton ( roughly 100,000 ) and creole ( aprox 100,000 ) and Occitan language records 5 times of corsican
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have attempted to describe the charts, the information is presented in a fragmented way, and the data points are often unclear or inaccurate (e.g., the reference to '600,000' and the parenthetical '250' lacks context). The overview is present but lacks clarity, and the comparison between the two charts is underdeveloped. To improve, ensure you clearly identify the key trends and provide accurate data points for all categories mentioned. The report needs to be more comprehensive to fully address the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Overall' and 'In addition', the connection between sentences is often weak. The referencing is sometimes confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two charts. To improve, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that links back to the main topic. Improving the structure of your sentences will help the overall progression of your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'occation' instead of 'Occitan' and 'juvenile' used incorrectly to describe adults. There is also a lack of variety in the language used to describe trends and figures. To achieve a higher band score, you should aim to use more precise terminology for describing data, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for'. Additionally, ensure you proofread for spelling errors and use words that are appropriate for an academic report context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('Alsatian and Occitan parents... were', 'records 5 times'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are awkward or incomplete, which occasionally impedes clarity. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement. Practice using a mix of simple and complex sentences, ensuring that your grammar is accurate before attempting more sophisticated structures. Proofreading for basic punctuation and capitalization is also essential.
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