Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This is a graph of a different kind of languages spoken by parents to adult. So accourding to this graph first language is Alsatian which is spoken habitually to adult. About 600 parents spoke this regional language to their child. on the other hand only about 200 parents speak this language to their children occasionally. Second language is Occitan which is spoken by 600 parents to their child habitually. if i talk about occasionally, there is almost one thousand parents who speak this language to their child. Third language is Breton, this language is spoken by only about 250 parents habitually and 400 parents speak this language occasionally. Forth language is Creole this language is spoken habitually by 100 parents and 100 occasionally. The last and fifth language is Corsican which is spoken habitually by almost 100 parents and occasionally also spoken by 100 parents. On the other hand i am seeing another graph of parents who speak regional language to their own children. Alsatian language is spoken by parents to their own children is almost 400. Occitan language is spoken by almost 250 parents. Breton language is spoken by almost 100 parents. Creole language is spoken by around about 100 parents and last language is Corsican which is spoken by almost 70 parents. This is complete analysis of this graph showing on screen to me.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the task by describing the provided data, but it lacks an overview or summary of the main trends. The information is presented as a list of individual data points rather than a comparative analysis. While the figures are generally accurate, the lack of grouping or synthesis makes it difficult for the reader to grasp the overall picture. To improve, you should group related data points and highlight significant differences or similarities between the two charts, rather than listing every figure sequentially. An introductory statement and a concluding overview are essential for a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. The text is essentially one long block, which hinders readability. While there is some attempt to use cohesive devices like 'on the other hand' and 'second language', the transitions are often mechanical or repetitive. The logical flow is hampered by the lack of clear structure between the two different charts. To improve, you should organize your report into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and two body paragraphs that compare and contrast the specific data points.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use the same phrases, such as 'is spoken by' and 'parents to their child'. There is little evidence of a range of vocabulary suitable for describing data, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'significant difference'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety in word choice prevents the response from demonstrating a higher level of lexical control. Try to incorporate more precise verbs and nouns related to statistical reporting to improve your range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains several grammatical errors, including issues with articles ('a different kind of languages'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or repetitive in their construction. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which limits the grammatical range. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters and sentence boundaries. To improve, focus on using a variety of sentence types, such as complex sentences with relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, and pay closer attention to basic grammatical accuracy and proofreading.

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