Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts below show the number of french adults whose parents spoke a french regional language.

First number of adults whose parents shope a regional language to them in childhood.

Language spoken habitually: Alsatian 600,000 people spoken habitually and 400,000 spoken occasionally.

Then we have Occitan people are spoken number of same 600,000 thousands and spoken in occasionally around 1.1 million higher number of spoken in occasionally.

Breton: In breton's people are spoken habitually its 250,000 and we seen spoken occasionally its 400,000 thousands.

CREOLE: People are spoken habitually in creole around 100,000 (one hundred thousand) also in spoken in occasionally its little above 100,000.

Last one is Corsican are numbers in spoken habitually 80,000 thousands and in spoken in occasionally its 100,000 thousands.

Now numbers of adults who speak in regional language to their own children.

LANGUAGE:

ALSATIAN: 400,000 four thousands.

OCCITAN: 250,000 two fifty thousand.

BRETON: almost 100,000 one hundred thousand.

CREOLE: almost 100,000 one thousand.

CORSICAN:80,000 eighty thousand.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response attempts to describe the data provided in the charts; however, it fails to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. Instead of providing an overview or comparing the data, the response is a fragmented list of figures. It lacks a clear introduction, a summary of key trends, and a logical comparison between the two charts. The data is presented in a raw, repetitive format rather than being synthesized into a coherent report. To improve, you must group information logically, identify trends (e.g., the decline in usage across generations), and avoid simply listing numbers.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response lacks a clear structure. It is presented as a series of disjointed bullet-point-like sentences rather than a cohesive report with paragraphs. There is no logical progression of ideas, and the use of cohesive devices is almost entirely absent. The transition between the two charts is abrupt, and the lack of linking words makes the text difficult to follow. To improve, you should use paragraphing to separate the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, and employ linking phrases such as 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' or 'Regarding the second chart' to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on the words provided in the prompt. There are frequent errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'people are spoken habitually' and 'spoken in occasionally,' which are grammatically incorrect and confusing. The use of numbers is also inconsistent and often inaccurate, such as writing '400,000 four thousands.' The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or comparisons effectively. You need to learn how to use verbs like 'decline,' 'remain stable,' or 'exceed' to describe data accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There is a lack of sentence variety, with most sentences being simple or fragmented. Issues include incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'people are spoken'), misuse of prepositions, and inconsistent capitalization (e.g., 'french,' 'breton'). The sentence structure is often non-standard, making it difficult to identify the subject and verb in many instances. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on using articles and prepositions correctly.

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