Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The first bar graph gives information about the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to then when they were children and second bar graph suggest the number of person who speak a French regional language to their own children.

According to the first and second bar graph. Firstly, language Alsatian is spoken habitually by 600 thousand people and it is less in number about 230 thousands for the persons who spoke occasionally and number of adult speak this language to their child are around 400 thousands. Occitan language is spoken around 600 thousands and slightly more than 1 million in habitually and occasionally respectively, and 230 thousands number of adult speak this language to their children.

Furthermore, Breton is spoken habitually more than the Creole which is 220 and 100 thousands same goes in spoken occasionally and it is around 400 thousands and 110 thousands. It has no big difference between this two languages in terms of adult speak to children in a regional language. Corsican is the least amount of regional language which is spoken habitually and occasionally.

To conclude, adult who speak regional language to their children is less than the adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the charts, but the presentation of data is inconsistent and lacks clarity. While you identify some figures, the comparison between the two charts is not fully developed. For instance, you mention specific numbers for Alsatian and Occitan but fail to provide a clear overview of the overall trends or a meaningful comparison between the two categories (childhood exposure vs. current usage). The conclusion is a good summary, but the body paragraphs rely too heavily on listing raw numbers without sufficient analysis or grouping of the data. To improve, focus on highlighting the most significant differences and similarities rather than listing every data point.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the phrase 'same goes in spoken occasionally' is awkward and does not effectively link the ideas. The transition between the first and second bar graph descriptions is abrupt. While there is a logical progression, the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the flow feel disjointed. Using a wider variety of cohesive devices, such as 'in contrast,' 'conversely,' or 'similarly,' would help improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision. You frequently use 'number of' and 'spoken,' which limits the range of your writing. There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'least amount of regional language' (should be 'least common') and 'number of person' (should be 'number of people'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied terminology to describe trends, such as 'prevalence,' 'habitual usage,' or 'decline,' and ensure that your collocations are natural and accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('adult who speak' should be 'adults who speak'), article usage ('the first bar graph' vs 'first bar graph'), and awkward phrasing ('it is less in number about 230 thousands'). While the meaning is generally understandable, these recurring errors prevent the writing from being considered fluent. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly pluralization and verb forms, will significantly improve the quality of your writing.

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