Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The horizontal bar graph illustrates the count of people who communicate in French regional language when they were juvenile. Now , they speak with their children and the population can be measured in number .
Looking from an overall perspective it is readily appearent that notably , Aisatian and Occitan were highest preference spoken habitually and spoken occasionally by parent and adult . While , Breton language also used to communicate . In addition , only two language were not in a high priority list used by parents and adult .
The chart demonstrates , the number of 600 thousand of parents spoke Aisatian and Occitan language and were same preference by people . Whilst, nearly 200 thousand of person speak religious language and spoke Breton . Almost 100 thousand parents Spoke creole language and continue with their tradition. While, under 100 thousand number of
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. Furthermore, the content is incomplete; the final sentence is cut off mid-thought, and the data description is fragmented. While you attempt to identify the main trends, the lack of a clear, structured overview and the failure to complete the report mean that the information is not fully developed. To improve, ensure you complete all sentences, provide a clear summary of the data, and meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a full analysis of the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical flow. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the transitions between ideas are disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is often awkward or incorrect, such as the misuse of 'While' at the start of sentences and the repetitive use of 'In addition'. The referencing is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two sets of data. To improve, focus on using linking words more naturally and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that contributes to the overall progression of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as using 'juvenile' to describe adults, 'religious language' instead of 'regional language', and 'highest preference' to describe data trends. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data with precision. To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing charts, such as 'the majority of', 'a significant proportion', or 'remained stable', and ensure you use terms accurately in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with article usage ('the Aisatian'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, such as the stray comma in 'Now , they speak'. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors in tense and word order. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and proofreading for punctuation errors that disrupt the flow of your writing.
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