Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The two bar charts compare the number of french adult, in thousands , who were exposed to regional language in childhood by their parents, and those who currently pass on a regional language to their own children.
In one hand it is evident that while a large number of adults were spoken to the regional language by their parentsal, significant fewer are continuing.
Looking at the first chart , which shows language spoken habitually to adult in theor childhood, occitan was the most comman, with approximately [redacted phone] adult having been addressed in this language . Alsatian was the second most prevalent at around [redacted phone] . In contrast breton around accounted for roughly [redacted phone] .
In conclusion the data shows a general pattern of decline for most regional language in France with the exception of occitan ,which appears to be gaining speakers in the younger generation. Thanking you for alot my speaker .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a comprehensive overview. While it mentions the two charts, the data presentation is inaccurate and incomplete. For instance, the student claims Occitan was the most common at 6,000,000, which is a significant misreading of the provided data (likely confusing units or misinterpreting the scale). Furthermore, the report lacks a clear comparison between the two charts, which is the core requirement of the task. The conclusion is also somewhat disconnected from the data provided. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe figures and provide a clear, analytical overview that highlights key trends and differences between the two sets of data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes misused, such as 'In one hand' (should be 'On the one hand') and 'Thanking you for alot my speaker' (which is irrelevant and inappropriate for an academic report). The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. While there is a basic structure, the lack of clear linking between the data points makes the information difficult to follow. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would enhance the overall flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors that impede clarity. There are frequent spelling mistakes such as 'french' (should be capitalized), 'parentsal', 'theor', and 'comman'. The word choice is often imprecise, such as 'alot my speaker', which is nonsensical in this context. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'regional language' and 'prevalent', the overall range is insufficient to convey the information with precision. More attention to accurate spelling and the use of academic collocations is necessary to reach a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes affect readability. Examples include 'number of french adult' (should be plural 'adults'), 'were spoken to the regional language' (incorrect passive construction), and 'significant fewer' (should be 'significantly fewer'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limits the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct prepositional usage would be beneficial.
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