Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph display the number of french whose parents parents spoke to them when they were kids and the who spoke to their own kid in french regional language.
Overall, it can be seen that most number of parents prferred to spoke kids in their childhood both ocationally and habitually prferred in occitan and least was corsican. While, when they become parents they used alsatian more to speak to their children.
The numbers alstian has accounted for maximun number in both habitually and ocassionaly with around 650 thousand and 1.1 million respectivelyof french adults whose parents spoke a french regional language to them. In contrast corsican has least numbers around 75 habiyually thousan and approximately 100 thousand ocassionally.
Bretan has 250 thosand and 400 thosand respectively. While creole has 100 thousand
The Alastian recored for large number of adults who speak to children with approximately 400 tousand, follwed by occitan with 250 thousand while bretan, creole and corsican has accounted for less than 100 thousad.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the presentation is significantly hindered by unclear data reporting and inaccuracies. While you identify the highest and lowest categories, the description of the data is often confusing, such as the mention of '650 thousand and 1.1 million' for Alsatian, which does not clearly distinguish between the two charts. Furthermore, the report lacks a clear overview of the trends, and some data points are missing or poorly integrated, such as the incomplete sentence regarding Creole. To improve, ensure you clearly label which chart you are describing and provide accurate data comparisons that are easy for the reader to follow.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical or misused, such as the abrupt transition 'While, when they become parents' and the fragmented sentence 'While creole has 100 thousand'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to follow the comparison between the two charts. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'conversely', 'furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical focus that connects back to the main topic.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors that occasionally impede readability (e.g., 'alstian', 'habiyually', 'thosand', 'recored'). You rely on basic descriptors and struggle with precise terminology for describing data trends. There is a lack of variety in how you express numbers and comparisons. To reach a higher band, you should work on spelling accuracy and incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary for describing statistical changes, such as 'accounted for', 'represented', 'a significant proportion', or 'a marginal figure'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The graph display', 'The numbers alstian has accounted'), missing articles, and incorrect word forms ('prferred to spoke kids'). Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that affect clarity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb tenses.
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