Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrates the number of parents who speak their local language like to their own children in French.

Overall, the Alsatian language speaking adults are dominating the french. whereas, Corsican language speaking adults speak least as compare all of the languages. The language like occitan, bretion and creole are speaking limited in a french.

Firstly, Alsatian languages are spoken by 400 thousands parents to their children ranked in first place. As a comparison occitan place second ranked with approximately 250 thousand parents speaks to their children. The number of difference between two languages parents are almost 150 thousands.

languages like Bretion, creole and corsican are spoken by 100 thousand and less than 100 thousand parents like Bretion speaks only 100 thousand,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is incomplete; the prompt asks for two charts (parents speaking to children, and adults speaking to their own children), but the response only addresses one. The data description is also imprecise, with several figures misstated or missing. The overview is present but lacks the necessary detail to fully capture the trends. To improve, ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed, provide accurate data points, and meet the length requirement to allow for a full development of the information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by the lack of sufficient data and the incomplete nature of the report. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly' and 'As a comparison', but they are often used mechanically or incorrectly. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences is disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus that contributes to the overall report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'language speaking adults are dominating the french' and 'language like occitan, bretion and creole are speaking limited'. The spelling of language names is inconsistent (e.g., 'Bretion' instead of 'Breton'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data with precision. To improve, learn specific collocations for describing trends and graphs, and ensure accurate spelling of key terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The number of difference between two languages parents are almost 150 thousands' and 'language like occitan... are speaking limited'. Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are inconsistent. There is a lack of complex structures, which limits the ability to demonstrate grammatical control. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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