Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.0)
So students ..today we are discussing about regional language that parents speak with their children before their adulthood now .some parents talk to their children in their native language and some talk in it only for granted so ... here's the chart of Number of adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Below:
Alsatian 600
Occitan 600
Speaking the regional language to your children is a very good thing . They should know everything about their region in which they're living their life so Now student look towards those Number of adults (in thousand)who speak a regional language to their own children
Alsatian 400
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is not a formal report; it adopts an informal, conversational tone ('So students ..today we are discussing') rather than an objective analysis of the data. The response fails to describe the charts effectively, providing only fragmented data points rather than a clear overview or comparison of the trends. The inclusion of personal opinions ('Speaking the regional language to your children is a very good thing') is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which requires a neutral, descriptive approach. The task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a logical structure or paragraphing. The text reads as a stream of consciousness rather than a structured report. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the transition between the introduction and the data presentation is abrupt and confusing. The use of phrases like 'Now student look towards' is inappropriate for the task type and does not facilitate a smooth flow of information. The overall arrangement is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended message.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic, informal language that is unsuitable for an academic report. There is no attempt to use specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'declined', 'proportion', or 'significant'. The phrasing is often awkward, such as 'talk in it only for granted', which does not convey a clear meaning. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express the information accurately or professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. There are frequent errors in punctuation, capitalization, and sentence structure, such as 'Number of adults (in thousand)who speak'. The use of '..' and the informal address to the reader indicate a lack of control over academic register. While the meaning is occasionally discernable, the frequent errors and lack of complex structures prevent the writing from reaching a higher band level.
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