Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Here is a chart That show the figures of adults who are french and thier parents speak thier regional language with them when he was child and also show the figures in numbers the parents that use language of thier own region to thier children.
The charts gives the idea of numbers of parents who spoke the french region language with thier childrens habitually and occasionally. Also gives the information abouts the differents languages like Aisatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole, and Corsican. There are two graph charts in which different amounts are mention.
The two charts provide information about the adults who listen the regional language from thier grandparents in thier cvhildhood and other provide the information about the parents who now use the regional language with thier own children.
Occitan language in the first chart mention the spoken habitually aropund 600 but on the other hand spoken occasionally increase from 1m. As well as the second chart shows that the Aisatian language parents spoke now with thier children is 400.
To sum up, These two charts highlights the different number of languages and the parents and child who listen and speak thier regionally languages habitually and occasionally.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to adequately describe the data provided. While it mentions the charts, the information is presented in a fragmented and confusing manner. Key features, such as the overall trends or comparisons between the two charts, are missing or inaccurately reported. For instance, the reference to '1m' for Occitan is not clearly supported by the provided data, and the description of the charts is repetitive. To improve, you must focus on identifying the most significant trends and comparing the data points clearly rather than listing isolated figures. The report lacks a clear overview, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'Also gives the information abouts' and 'To sum up, These two charts highlights'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the connection between the charts and the specific languages mentioned. The structure lacks a logical flow, and the transition between the introduction, body paragraphs, and the conclusion is weak, which hinders the overall readability of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'thier' (their), 'cvhildhood' (childhood), and 'aropund' (around). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data accurately, relying on basic terms like 'figures', 'numbers', and 'information'. To reach a higher band, you need to use more precise language related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'significant increase', and ensure that your spelling and word forms are accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'charts That show', 'parents speak thier regional language'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are simple and often poorly constructed, leading to confusion. For example, 'the adults who listen the regional language' should be 'the adults who heard the regional language'. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, correct verb forms, and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement and pluralization to improve your score.
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