Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar charts illustrate the numbers of French youngsters spoke regional language by habitually and occasionally. Moreover, they spoke regional language Infront of their children.

Overall, Alsatian and Occitan both were the highest spoken by parents when they were child. Occitan was spoken occasionally higher than habitually. In contrast, Creole and Corsican both were the lowest spoken by individuals.

By habitually, 600 thousand parents spoke both Alsatian and Occitan when they were child. Around 250 thousand guardians used Breton as a regional language Infront of their Childs. Less than 100 individuals spoke both Creole and Corsican when they have own child.

By occasionally, more than 1 Millian parents used Occitan language Infront of their Children. In contrast, less than 400 thousand people used Alsatian, Breton, Creole and Corsican as a regional language Infront of their toddlers.

When these adults became parents themselves, the use of every regional language decline noticeably. They all were spoke the highest Alsatian as a regional language. The figure for Occitan fell sharply, while Breton, Creole and Corsican were spoken less than 300 thousand by people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task by describing the provided charts, but the analysis is inconsistent and contains significant inaccuracies. For example, you state that 600 thousand parents spoke Alsatian and Occitan habitually, but the data does not support this specific figure for both languages. Furthermore, the description of the second chart (parents speaking to their own children) is confusingly integrated with the first. You have attempted to highlight key features, but the lack of precision in reporting the data points hinders the overall task achievement. To improve, ensure that you carefully cross-reference the labels and values on the axes to avoid misrepresenting the information provided in the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is frequently interrupted by unclear referencing and awkward transitions. Phrases like 'By habitually' and 'By occasionally' are used as sentence starters but do not function effectively as cohesive devices in this context. The connection between the two charts is not clearly articulated, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison. While there is some attempt to use linking words like 'Moreover' and 'In contrast', the overall flow is mechanical and sometimes confusing, which limits the coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms such as 'spoke', 'used', and 'language'. There are also several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'youngsters spoke regional language by habitually' and 'Infront of their Childs'. The term 'Millian' is a spelling error for 'million'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise reporting verbs (e.g., 'declined', 'remained stable', 'fluctuated') and improve your control over word forms and pluralization, such as using 'children' instead of 'Childs' or 'toddlers'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies on a limited range of simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'They all were spoke the highest Alsatian' and 'the use of every regional language decline noticeably'. Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are problematic throughout the text. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar—such as missing articles and incorrect verb forms—prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction and ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects will significantly improve your accuracy.

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