Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart represents the data about the French youngsters whose parents spoke a French language when they were adolescent and who speak a French language to their children. Number is given in thousands.
In an overview, Occitan was highly spoken occasionally by parents to children in childhood, while Alsatian is widely spoken by adults to their own children as compared to other language.
Alsatian and Occitan was spoken habitually by same number of adults whose parents spoke in childhood which can be recorded as 600. While, Breton was spoken by half number of adults. Creole and Corsican had almost same number of people who spoke this language habitually. Alsatian, Occitan, Brenton, Creole and Corsian was spoken by around 200, 1m, 400, 200, 198 people respectively.
Number of adults who speak language to their own children. Creole and Corsican was less spoken by adults and number can be lies between [redacted phone]. While Breton was spoken by approximately 200 adults. Occitan can be accounted for 250 while Alsatian has double of it spoken.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task but lacks precision in data reporting. While you identify the main trends, the data points are often inaccurate or confusingly presented. For example, you state that 'Alsatian, Occitan, Brenton, Creole and Corsian was spoken by around 200, 1m, 400, 200, 198 people respectively,' which does not align with the provided chart figures. Furthermore, the overview is somewhat vague. To improve, ensure you carefully transcribe the data from the charts and provide a clear, accurate summary of the key features, such as the overall decline in usage between the two generations, rather than just listing numbers.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. Phrases like 'While, Breton was spoken...' and 'Number of adults who speak language to their own children' are used to transition between ideas, but the logical flow between sentences is often disjointed. The referencing is also occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track which data set is being discussed. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'spoken' and 'number.' There are also issues with word choice and spelling, such as 'adolescent' (which is not appropriate for describing childhood) and 'Brenton/Corsian' (misspellings of Breton/Corsican). To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more varied and precise vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuate,' 'decline,' 'predominant,' or 'proportion.' Additionally, ensure that you use terminology accurately in the context of the data provided.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Alsatian and Occitan was spoken,' 'Creole and Corsican was less spoken'). The sentence structures are relatively simple, and there are errors in punctuation and article usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors impacts the overall quality of the writing. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and try to incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, while ensuring they are grammatically correct.
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