Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar charts illustrates the number of adults whose parents spoke a French original language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Overall, it is clear that Occitan language is prominent figure in both spoken habitually and spoken occasionally. Whereas, the Corsican language showed a decline and Cresole language remained stable in the whole life.
On the one hand, the Occitan language is accounted for a largest language in children who speak nearly 1.2 million occassionally. The Occitan language showed fluctuating figure started with 600 thousands with 1.2 million and showed downward trend approximately 250 thousands adults speak their own original language.
On the other hand, the remaining languages showed different trends. The parents communite less with their children in Corsican recorded as 1000 to 500 in the timefrme.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have attempted to describe the charts, the information provided is incomplete and lacks a clear, accurate summary of the data. Several figures are misinterpreted or presented in a confusing manner, such as the reference to '1000 to 500' for Corsican, which does not align with the provided data. To improve, ensure you cover all categories shown in the charts and provide a more precise overview of the trends, ensuring that your data points are accurately transcribed from the source material.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive start. However, the logical progression is hindered by unclear referencing and mechanical use of cohesive devices. For example, the transition 'Whereas, the Corsican language showed a decline' is grammatically awkward and does not effectively link to the previous sentence. The use of 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' is somewhat formulaic and does not always suit the content being presented. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows naturally from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'original language' instead of 'regional language' and 'prominent figure' used to describe a language. Additionally, there are spelling errors like 'occassionally' and 'communite'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the precision required for a higher band. To improve, try to incorporate more specific terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained constant', or 'experienced a downward trend', and pay closer attention to the spelling of key terms used in the prompt.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The bar charts illustrates') and incorrect verb forms ('is accounted for a largest language'). Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'The Occitan language showed fluctuating figure started with 600 thousands with 1.2 million'. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for basic errors is essential.
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