Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The give bar charts depict the number of French youngsters whose family members spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional

language to their own children.

Overall, the number adults spoken habitually Alsatian and Occitan which was the highest among other languages while they spoken occasionally Occitan language more than other languages. However, Creole and Corsican languages were the lowest in their own children.

The number of young generation spoken habitually Alsatian and Occitan languages 600 thousands . Breton, Creole and Corsican were the lowest speak among the people nearly 230 thousands, 100 thousands and 50 thousands respectively. Young adults spoken occasionally Occitan languages which was the highest among others above 1 million thousands . Alsatian language were the lowest compared to habitually.

Alsatian and Occitan languages were the highest speak by children 400 thousands and 200 thousands. Breton, Creole and Corsican were below 100 thousands .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the charts, but the presentation of data is often confusing and inaccurate. For instance, stating '1 million thousands' is a significant error in data interpretation. While you identify the highest and lowest categories, the lack of clear comparison and the misrepresentation of figures hinder the clarity of the report. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe the units provided in the prompt and group data logically to highlight trends rather than just listing numbers. The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the two charts, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the overall relationship between the two sets of data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'the lowest speak among the people' and 'compared to habitually' are awkward and do not effectively link ideas. The progression of information is somewhat disjointed, particularly in the third paragraph where the jump between different languages and figures feels abrupt. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'conversely') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'spoken' or 'speak' where more precise terminology is required, such as 'transmitted', 'utilised', or 'communicated'. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'youngsters' (which is informal) and 'young generation'. Additionally, there are errors in collocation, such as 'lowest speak', which should be 'lowest number of speakers'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more academic vocabulary related to statistics and trends, and ensure you use the correct word forms (e.g., 'speakers' instead of 'speak' as a noun).

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Alsatian language were the lowest') and missing articles or prepositions. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'the number adults spoken habitually Alsatian'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and a correctly conjugated verb. Proofreading for basic agreement errors will significantly improve the clarity of your writing.

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