Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The chart illustrates the number of French adults whose parents spoke regional language to them when they were minors and number of that adults who speaks their native regional language to their children measured in thousands.

there are three bar graphs here which shows comparison among people who speaks regional language to their children and after them among these adults how many of them speaks to their own children while first two bar graph shows comparison of spoken habitually and occasionally.

Around 600 thousands Alsatian and Occitan people speaks regional language to their children habitually

while less than 300 thousands people from Creole , Breton, Corsican speaks it habitually to their children.

less than 300 thousands people from Alsatian, Creole and Corsican speaks it occasionally to their children and highest people from the Occitan speaks it to their children occasionally while for Alsatian it is moderate.

there are very few adults who speaks their regional language to their children in Breton ,Creole and Corsican ,less than 100 thousands people speaks it to their own children while highest 400 thousands adults from Alsatian and around 250 thousands adults from Occitan speaks to their own children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe the data, but it fails to clearly distinguish between the two distinct charts provided in the prompt. The report confuses the 'parents spoke to them' data with the 'speak to their own children' data, leading to significant inaccuracies in the information presented. The overview is missing, and the data selection is disorganized, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. To improve, you must clearly identify the two separate datasets and provide a summary of the main trends or differences between them, rather than listing figures in a way that misrepresents the source material.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no clear introduction or overview, and the paragraphs are poorly organized, making the progression of ideas difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are largely absent or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'speaks' and 'there are'. The lack of logical sequencing between sentences makes the report feel like a list of disjointed observations rather than a cohesive analysis. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks for different data sets and employ linking words like 'in contrast', 'furthermore', or 'conversely' to connect your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the same verbs ('speaks', 'shows') and struggle with accurate terminology for data description. There are also errors in word form, such as 'that adults' instead of 'those adults' and 'minors' which is not the most natural choice in this context. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. You should aim to use a wider variety of reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'demonstrates', 'indicates', 'proportion', 'figure', and 'category', to enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people speaks', 'adults who speaks') and pluralization. Sentence structures are simple and often lack proper punctuation, which hinders the flow. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which limits your ability to demonstrate grammatical range. To improve, focus on basic subject-verb agreement rules and practice using complex sentences with relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to combine your ideas more effectively.

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