Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graphs provide information on how many children were spoken to in a French regional language and then carried on this tradition when they in turn became parents.

600,000 children were often spoken to in Alsatian and Occitan while about a half of this number habitually heard Breton. 100,000 adults were frequently spoken to in Creole and slightly less in Corsican. Occitan was occasionally spoken to over 1 million adults in their childhood, while only 400,000 were spoken to in Breton. The numbers that communicated occasionally using Creole and Corsican ranged between 100,000 and 120,000. Lastly those whose parents occasionally spoke Alsatian to them stood at 230,000.

Keeping with the trend of passing on a French regional language to their children, 400,000 adults spoke Alsatian to their children and 250,000 communicated in Occitan. The remaining three regional languages were not spoken as much. Less than 100,000 adults used them to speak to their children.

Although, Alsatian and Occitan were habitually used by French adults to speak to their children and Occitan was spoken occasionally to a greater extent than Alsatian, those who heard Alsatian in their childhood were more likely to speak it to their own children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered both charts and made relevant comparisons between the languages. However, the report lacks a clear distinction between the two charts in the body paragraphs, which makes it slightly difficult to follow which data set is being discussed. Additionally, some figures are presented in a way that is hard to verify against the provided charts, such as the claim that '100,000 adults were frequently spoken to in Creole'. Ensuring that data points are clearly linked to the specific category (habitual vs. occasional) would improve the accuracy of your reporting.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding summary. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Keeping with the trend' and 'Although', to link ideas. However, the transition between the two charts could be smoother. The use of referencing is occasionally unclear; for example, in the third paragraph, 'The remaining three regional languages' is vague. Improving the use of cohesive devices to explicitly contrast the two charts would help the reader navigate the information more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'habitually', 'occasionally', and 'communicated'. There is an attempt to use less common vocabulary, though some phrasing is slightly repetitive. For instance, you frequently use 'spoken to' or 'speak to'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'communicated' or 'used' and ensure collocations are precise. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but lacks the sophistication and flexibility required for a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as the 'Although...' sentence in the final paragraph. There are some grammatical slips, such as 'when they in turn became parents' (missing subject 'they') and 'Although, Alsatian and Occitan...' (unnecessary comma after 'Although'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and punctuation rules for complex sentences will help improve your accuracy.

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