Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given bar graphs illustrates the number of French elders whose parents talk French regional language to them when they were in their childhood and further another bar graph depicts how many mature persons speak a French regional language to their own children.

To commence with the language which was spoken habitually, Alsatian was accounted at 600 thousands, while it was escalated by neglizible amount for Occitan. Breton language was spoken by nearly 300 thousands. However, there was a neglizible difference noted in the Creole and Corsican languages. Moreover, in case of languages which were spoken occasionally, it was just over 200 thousands for Alsatian, and then suddenly Occitan was the highly spoken by the parents of the grown ups in their younger age. Breton was the language which was spoken by 400 thousands. The numbers for Creole and Corsican was constant at 200 thousands.

Further the bar graphs collate that the number of adults who speak a regional language to their own children was 400 thousands in case of Alsatian, then it was decreased and followed by less than 300 thousands for Occitan. However, nearly identical numbers were shown in the another three languages that is Breton, Creole, Corsican by about 100 thousands.

Overall , it is clear that Occitan was spoken by maximum number of parents of adults to them in their younger age, whilst Corsican was spoken by minimum numbers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by describing the two charts. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. While you mention that Occitan was the most spoken, you fail to synthesize the overall decline in usage across generations, which is the most significant feature of the data. Some figures are described in a way that is difficult to follow, such as the comparison of 'habitual' and 'occasional' speakers, which could have been grouped more effectively to highlight the contrast between the two charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes repetitive or slightly unnatural, such as 'To commence with' and 'Further the bar graphs collate'. The progression of ideas within paragraphs is occasionally disjointed, particularly when jumping between languages without a clear comparative structure. Referencing is sometimes unclear, for example, 'the another three languages' is grammatically awkward and disrupts the flow of the comparison.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

There is an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, but there are several instances of word-choice errors and spelling mistakes. For example, 'elders' is used incorrectly to mean 'adults', 'neglizible' is misspelled, and 'grown ups' is too informal for an academic report. Phrases like 'escalated by neglizible amount' are imprecise. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensuring correct spelling of key terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('graphs illustrates'), incorrect preposition usage ('talk French regional language to them'), and awkward phrasing ('the language which was spoken habitually'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and article usage.

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