Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The rendered bar charts illustrate the information about the count of French adults whose parents spoked french regional language to them when they were child and the number of French families who speak french regional language to their own children. The data is calibrated in thousands.
Looking from an overall perspective, majority of french people spoken occasionally in contrast to habitually. However, the alsatian language also have the highest ratio among all other languages.
Looking in more detail, it can be clearly seen that occitan language
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the task achievement score. Because the essay is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, it fails to present a full overview or describe the data in sufficient detail. It does not address all parts of the task, as it lacks a comprehensive analysis of the provided charts. To improve, you must ensure you complete the report by covering all key features and trends, and you must meet the minimum word count to allow for a full development of your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is too brief to demonstrate effective paragraphing or a logical progression of ideas. While there is a basic attempt at an introduction and an overview, the abrupt ending prevents any coherent structure from being established. Cohesive devices are minimal, and the lack of a complete text makes it impossible to assess the flow of information. To improve, focus on structuring your report with a clear introduction, a distinct overview paragraph, and detailed body paragraphs that logically group the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, such as the repeated use of 'French' and 'language'. There are also errors in word choice and form, such as 'spoked' instead of 'spoke' and 'child' instead of 'childhood'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to use a wider variety of synonyms and ensure you are using the correct word forms. Focus on learning collocations related to data description, such as 'a significant proportion' or 'a downward trend'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that impede clarity. For example, 'parents spoked' is incorrect (should be 'spoke'), and 'when they were child' should be 'when they were children'. The sentence structure is simplistic, and the incomplete nature of the text means there is no opportunity to demonstrate a range of complex structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Ensure that your sentences are complete and grammatically sound before moving on to more complex structures.
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