Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The provided bar graph illustrates the numbers of youngster whose native language is French regarding with those who speak a regional language to their own children's. overall, the ratio of spoken persons occasionally, is rise than those persons who speak throughout the life . numbers of Alsatian are moderately increase rather than native speakers.

initially, Alsatian adults gradually rose up in both conditions but decrease in occasionally speaking persons . turning to the significant increase around about 1m in Occitan . In contrast two graphs ( spoken habitually ) and ( parents who speak to their own children ) are shown same with little variations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. Furthermore, the content is underdeveloped and lacks a clear, accurate summary of the data provided in the charts. The description of the trends is confusing and does not clearly distinguish between the two categories (parents speaking to children versus adults speaking to their own children). Key information, such as specific figures or clear comparisons between the different regional languages, is missing or inaccurately described. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the task and provide a more detailed analysis of the data trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used incorrectly or are absent, making the relationship between sentences unclear. For example, the transition 'initially' is used inappropriately as there is no chronological sequence to describe. The lack of clear referencing makes it difficult for the reader to understand which data points are being discussed. To improve, focus on using clear topic sentences and linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which hinders communication. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'spoken persons occasionally' and 'rise than those persons'. The use of terminology related to the charts is imprecise, and there is a lack of variety in the language used to describe trends. Spelling errors, such as 'youngster' instead of 'youngsters' or 'numbers', also detract from the overall quality. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to data description, such as 'a significant increase' or 'a gradual decline'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede meaning. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'numbers of Alsatian are moderately increase'), incorrect preposition use, and fragmented sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences that are often poorly constructed. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of parentheses. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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