Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar charts illustrate the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that there were considerable differences among the categories shown in the bar charts. While some categories recorded relatively high figures, others had considerably lower values. In additions the highest and lowest figures were clearly noticeable, and the remanining categories showed moderate differences throughout the comparison.

First graph, about spoken habitually and second spoken occasionally. Alsatian was considerable higher at 600. and While Corsican was considerable lower. Second graph Occitan relatively higher at 1m.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While the introduction and overview are present, the body paragraphs are severely underdeveloped. The data description is fragmented, lacking a clear comparison of the figures provided in the charts. Key information is missing, and the analysis is too brief to provide a comprehensive report. To improve, you must describe the data in detail, highlighting trends and making meaningful comparisons between the categories rather than just listing isolated figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into an introduction, an overview, and a very brief body section. However, the lack of development makes the progression of ideas difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used in the overview, such as 'While' and 'In addition', but the connection between sentences in the final paragraph is weak and fragmented. The paragraphing is present, but the content within the paragraphs is insufficient to demonstrate a logical flow of information. More attention should be paid to linking sentences and ensuring that each paragraph develops a clear, coherent point.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'relatively high figures' and 'considerably lower' are used, but there is little variety in the language used to describe the data. There are also errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'In additions' and 'remanining'. The vocabulary is sufficient for basic communication but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band score. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase', 'decrease', and 'significant', and ensure accurate spelling throughout your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and fragmented sentences. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'Alsatian was considerable higher' (should be 'considerably') and 'Second graph Occitan relatively higher' (missing a verb). The lack of complete, complex sentence structures limits the grammatical range. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of full stops in the middle of phrases. To improve, focus on constructing complete sentences with a subject and a verb, and practice using complex structures like subordinate clauses to link your ideas more effectively.

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