Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graphs demonstrate the numeric data of french youngsters whose guardian spoke a french regional to them since their childhood and the number who speak french language to their children.

Overall, in Alsatian the number of parents whose spoke french regional language habitually to their children in childhood were the most broadly same Occitan. The french spoken occasionally in Occitan were the most. however, in both spoken habitually and occasionally Corsican were the least throughout the period.

The habitually spoken french language in Alsatian and Occitan were the same which was 600. Breton recorded around 250 number of adults in thousand. In contrast Creole and Corsican both were the least 200 and below than 200 respectively.

While, the number of adults who speak a regional language to their children in Alsatian is the most which is 400. Breton, Creole and Corsican are the similar to each other 100, around 90, approximately 800 respectively. Occitan is on the second most country of adults who speaks a regional language to their own children it is about 260.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify key data points, the description of the trends is often confusing. For instance, the statement 'the number of parents whose spoke french regional language habitually to their children in childhood were the most broadly same Occitan' is unclear and grammatically problematic. Additionally, some data points are inaccurate, such as the claim that Breton, Creole, and Corsican are similar, with one figure cited as '800', which does not align with the provided visual data. To improve, focus on clearly grouping data and ensuring that the figures cited are precise and accurately reflect the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the logical progression within paragraphs is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes misused, such as the awkward transition 'While, the number of adults...'. Referencing is also problematic; for example, the use of 'the most' and 'the least' without clear subjects makes it difficult to follow which category is being discussed. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Conversely') and ensuring that each sentence clearly refers back to the data would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'number', 'most', and 'least' to describe the data. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'numeric data of french youngsters' and 'the second most country of adults'. These errors occasionally make the meaning ambiguous. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'accounted for', or 'a significant proportion'. Additionally, ensure that you use the correct terminology for the subjects (e.g., 'languages' rather than 'country').

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the number of parents... were' and 'Occitan is on the second most country...'. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'The french spoken occasionally in Occitan were the most'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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