Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar charts illustrate how the number of French younge whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they have children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that there were considerable differences among the categories shown in the bar chart. While some categories recorded relatively high figures, others had considerably lower values. In addition, the highest and lowest figures were clearly noticeable, and the remaining categories showed moderate differences throughout the comparison.

There were three categories language such as Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole, Corsican. and three graph in first spoken habitually and second occasionally. In first graph there were both Alsatian and Occitan recorded almost same at 600. While Corsican considerably lower compare to others at 180. The figure for Breton was almost twice as high as that for Creole.

In second graph Occitan was relatively higher compare to others. and Creole and Corsican were moderate different compare to first graph. Clearly noticeable Alsatian was decrise at 21

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe the charts but fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. The introduction is confusing, and the data selection is problematic; you have not clearly distinguished between the two charts (parents speaking to children vs. adults speaking to their own children). Furthermore, the data points mentioned (e.g., '600', '180') are not clearly linked to the specific categories or the correct chart, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. To improve, ensure you clearly identify the two distinct sets of data and provide a more structured comparison of the key features rather than listing isolated figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often inaccurate, such as 'In first graph' and 'In second graph', which are grammatically incomplete. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, and the lack of clear referencing makes it difficult to track which data point is being discussed. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Conversely') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'figures', 'categories', and 'higher/lower'. There are also issues with word choice and word formation, such as 'younge' instead of 'young people' or 'adults', and 'decrise' instead of 'decreased'. The lack of precise terminology to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'witnessed a decline') hinders the clarity of the report. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic descriptors for data trends will significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response that occasionally impede communication. Examples include missing articles ('In first graph'), incorrect verb forms ('Alsatian was decrise'), and sentence fragments ('There were three categories language such as...'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on using articles and prepositions correctly. Proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement will also help reduce the frequency of errors.

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