Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar charts illustrate how the number of French youngsters whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children .

Overall, it can be clearly seen that there were considerable differences among the categories shown in the bar chart. While some categories recorded relatively high figures, others had considerably lower values. In addition, the highest and lowest figures were clearly noticeable, and the remaining categories showed moderate differences throughout the comparison.

There were three categories of languages such as Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole, Corsican. and three graphs in first spoken habitually and second occasionally. In first graph there were both Alsatian and Occitan recorded almost the same at 600. While Corsican considerably was lower compared to others at 180. The figure for Breton was almost twice as high as that for Creole.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is incomplete; the introduction is a sentence fragment, and the analysis fails to cover the second chart (speaking to own children) entirely. The description of the first chart is also somewhat vague, lacking a clear overview of the data trends. To improve, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed, provide a complete overview of the data, and ensure the response meets the minimum length requirement to avoid a penalty.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The introduction is grammatically incomplete, making it difficult to follow. While some cohesive devices like 'While' and 'In addition' are used, they are often applied mechanically or in contexts where the sentence structure is flawed. The transition between the overview and the body paragraph is abrupt. To improve, focus on creating clear, complete sentences and using linking words to connect ideas more naturally rather than just listing data points.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is somewhat repetitive and limited. Phrases like 'recorded almost the same' and 'considerably was lower' show a lack of precision in describing statistical data. There is an attempt to use some relevant terminology, but the range is insufficient for a higher band. The phrasing 'three categories of languages such as...' is awkward and inaccurate given the list provided. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase', 'decrease', and 'compare' will help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. The first paragraph is a sentence fragment, lacking a main verb. There are issues with word order, such as 'Corsican considerably was lower', and punctuation errors, such as the period after 'Corsican'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and the lack of control over complex structures is evident. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—and proofread for punctuation and word order errors.

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