Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

THE BAR CHART ILLUSTRATE THE NUMBER OF FRENCH ADULTS WHOSE PARENTS SPOKE A FRENCH REGIONAL LANGUAGE TO THEM WHEN THEY WERE CHILDREN AND THE NUMBER WHO SPEAK A FRENCH LANGUAGE TO THEIR OWN CHILDREN.

OVERALL, NUMBER OF ADULT WHOSE PARENTS SPOKE REGIONAL LANGUAGE CONTAIN TWO CATEGORY. ONE IS SPOKEN HABITUALLY ANOTHER ONE IS SPOKEN OCCASIONALLY, OCCITAN LANGUAGE IS A LARGER NUMBER OF LANGUAGE IN SPOKEN OCCASIONALLY CATEGORY.

BOTH OCCITAN AND ALASTION LANGUAGE ARE LARGER NUMBER IN SPOKEN HABITUALLY. IN CONTRAST ALASTION LANGUAGE IS DOMINATE NUMBER OF ADULT WHO SPEAK REGIONAL LANGUAGE WITH THEIR OWN CHILDREN

IN DETAIL, NUMBER OF ADULT WHOSE PARENTS SPOKE A REGIONAL LANGUAGE TO THEM CHILDHOOD, SHOWN WITH TWO CATEGORY IN BOTH CATEGORY OCCITAN LANGUAGE DOMINATE IN BOTH HABITUALLY 600 AND OCCASIONALLY WITH 1.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is underdeveloped and lacks a clear, accurate summary of the data provided. While the student attempts to identify categories, the description of the figures is confusing and inaccurate, particularly the reference to '1' for Occitan. The report fails to provide a comprehensive overview or a clear comparison between the two charts, and the lack of sufficient detail means the task is only partially addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical, such as 'In detail' or 'In contrast', which do not effectively link the ideas. The referencing is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two charts. The overall structure is disjointed, and the lack of clear transitions between the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs hinders the flow of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on the words provided in the prompt. There are significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'dominate number of adult' and 'larger number of language'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the precision required for an Academic Task 1 report. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology to describe statistical trends or comparisons, which limits the ability to convey information clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The bar chart illustrate'), missing articles (e.g., 'number of adult'), and incorrect sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors in punctuation and capitalization. The frequent errors in basic grammar make the text difficult to read and demonstrate a lack of control over sentence construction.

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