Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The two charts show information about languages a parents speaks with them in regional language.
Overall, There were many adults whose parents conversation with each other in region spoken alastaian and occitan were 600 language in childhood a spoken habitually their parents are and spoken occasionally more than 1 million .Aparents whoes spoken to their own childern but mostly spoken language were Alsatian.
A parents whoes spoken their childhood habitually different langauge first one is Alsatian there number are 600 and occitan language spoken by 600 number. Breton were sopken by 100 and corsicon more than 0. A people who spoken occasionally
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. The description of the data is fragmented and lacks a clear overview or a logical comparison of the two charts. Key information, such as the distinction between the two charts (parents speaking to children vs. adults speaking to their own children), is not clearly articulated. The data points provided are often inaccurate or poorly presented, making it difficult for the reader to understand the trends or specific figures shown in the charts. To improve, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed with sufficient detail and accurate data reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. There is no clear paragraphing, and the progression of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, making the text difficult to follow. For example, the transition between the introduction and the body is non-existent, and the sentences do not flow logically from one to the next. The use of referencing is unclear, and the overall arrangement of information is confusing. To improve, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and specific details grouped logically by category or trend.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are numerous errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'alastaian' for Alsatian, 'corsicon' for Corsican, and 'childern' for children. The phrasing is often repetitive and lacks the precision required for an academic report. Many words are used incorrectly in context, such as 'conversation' instead of 'conversations' or 'language' used as a verb. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of key terms and expanding your range of vocabulary related to describing charts, trends, and comparisons.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that distort meaning. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'A parents whoes spoken'), sentence structure, and basic syntax. Many sentences are incomplete or lack a clear subject and verb. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the misuse of articles and verb tenses makes the text difficult to parse. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and a correctly conjugated verb.
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