Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given charts compares the data of french adult parents whose spoke a french language when they're children.

Overall ,There is a some notable things on table where occitan language is dominated in there childhood. Conversely in when they became parents they Spoked a Alsatian language most to their childern.

After analysis the data closely, we can see that the languages are various while spoken habitually to them in also on spoken occassionally to them while they're childern. However Occitan was so high as compared to others around 600 at habitually while around 1.1m on occasionally. At the moment Alstian following closely at habitually by around 600 but at occasionally only remains at 200.On the other hand Breton also spoken with high numbers. Some how the Creole and Corsican at 4th and 5th position withe the around same number of the Data. Similarly, they have only around 100 at habitually and also 100 at occasionally.

In the next table where we can see that information regarding adults number who speak a regional language to their children. At the moment Alsatian ranked at top with 400 while Occitan following by around 260. Meanwhile Breton and Creole is similar around 100. Some how Corsican remain at last ranked with around 50.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identified key trends, the comparison between the two charts is underdeveloped. You mention the data points, but the description lacks a clear overview of the shift in language usage over generations. The report would benefit from a more precise summary of the data, as some figures are approximated loosely (e.g., 'around 1.1m'). To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the two categories of 'habitually' and 'occasionally' and provide a more cohesive comparison of the two charts rather than describing them as separate entities.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Some how' and 'At the moment' are used inappropriately, which disrupts the flow of information. The transition between the first and second chart is abrupt. To improve, use a wider range of linking words such as 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' or 'Consequently' to connect ideas more logically. Additionally, ensure that referencing (e.g., 'the latter,' 'the former') is used correctly to avoid ambiguity.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'french adult parents whose spoke' and 'Spoked a Alsatian language'. The use of 'dominated in there childhood' is also imprecise. While you attempt to use some specific terminology related to the charts, the lack of variety and the frequency of errors in basic word forms hinder the clarity of your writing. Focus on using more precise verbs and nouns, and ensure you check for common spelling errors like 'childern' and 'occassionally'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The given charts compares'), incorrect verb tenses ('whose spoke'), and awkward sentence structures ('After analysis the data closely'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capital letters. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using articles correctly. Proofreading for basic errors will significantly improve your score.

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