Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph below gives us the information about the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Overall, it is crystal clear that the French adults whose parents spoke more French language to them when they were children compared to peoples who speak a French regional language to their own children.

At a fleeting glance, Alsatian parents spoke more French language habitually than occasionally to them in childhood. Occitan spoke 600 thousands habitually and 1m as occasionally. Breton spoke less habitually as compared to occasionally . Creole parents spoke less French language to their children in both habitually and occasionally. Corsican parents also spoke less French language to their children in habitually and occasionally.

And in the next graph it is clearly visible that Alsatian people spoke most French language to their children as compared to other countries. Occitan parents speak 250 in thousands French language to their own children. Breton adults spoke 90 thousands French as their regional language to their children. Creole number is bit low than Breton .The adults of Corsican spoke 60 thousands French as their regional language to their children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task but fails to accurately interpret the data. You have confused the categories, referring to the languages themselves (e.g., 'Alsatian', 'Occitan') as if they were the parents. Furthermore, the description of the data is inconsistent; for instance, you mention '1m' for Occitan, which is not supported by the provided context. The overview is also problematic as it is grammatically unclear and does not effectively summarize the main trends. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the categories (languages) and the subjects (adults/parents) and focus on reporting the figures accurately without adding external information or misinterpreting the labels.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'and' to start sentences. Referencing is also unclear; for example, 'in the next graph' is an inappropriate way to refer to the second chart in a report. The transition between the two charts lacks a clear analytical link. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Conversely') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data comparison.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use 'spoke' and 'language' without variation. There are also significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'peoples who speak' instead of 'people who speak' or 'adults who speak'. The phrase '600 thousands' is incorrect; it should be '600,000' or '600 thousand'. The lack of precision in describing the data (e.g., 'bit low') hinders the professional tone required for an Academic Task 1 report. Expanding your vocabulary to include terms like 'habitually', 'occasionally', 'proportion', and 'decline' would significantly enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'Alsatian parents spoke more French language habitually than occasionally to them', which is syntactically confusing. The sentence structure is largely simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as the opening sentence which is a run-on. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and ensuring subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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