Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given horizontal chart data illustrates the number of French adults whose parents spoke a french language to them during their childhood and number who speak a French language to their own children.

Overall it is crystal clear that the people who spoke French habitually is highest in the Occitan and Alsatian city comparing to others and similarly this city is at peak in speaking French occasionally.

At a fleeting glance,the minimal French speaking habitually city is Corsican which is less than 200 further followed by Creole that is almost 200.Moreover,Breton is closest to 300 and Alsatian is seen similar as the Occitan which are visible at around 600.On the other hand,Occitan is again noticeable at peak where French is spoken occasionally which is tracked by Breton at almost 400.Despite,Alsatian is some part more than 200 which are chased by the Creole and Corsican which are comparable having some difference.

Moving ahead,in Alsatian number of adults who speak a regional language to their own children are towering to 400 than captured by Occitan at around 250.Breton is facing less than 100 which came in the same condition like last two cities Creole and Corsican which are also seen below the 100.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the highest and lowest values for both categories. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the report refers to 'cities' when the data actually refers to regional languages (e.g., Occitan, Alsatian), which is a significant misinterpretation of the data labels. While the key trends are identified, the lack of precision in identifying the categories (languages vs. cities) and the somewhat disjointed presentation of the data points prevent a higher score. The overview is present but could be more clearly linked to the specific trends shown in the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or awkward, such as 'Moving ahead' or 'At a fleeting glance'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when the text refers to 'this city' or 'the last two cities', which confuses the reader because the data represents languages rather than geographical locations. The progression of ideas is somewhat repetitive, and the flow between sentences could be improved by using more varied and natural linking phrases to connect the data points more logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There is a reliance on basic descriptors like 'highest', 'peak', and 'similar'. The student struggles with accurate terminology, repeatedly referring to regional languages as 'cities', which is a significant lexical error. Phrases like 'towering to 400' and 'chased by' are not standard collocations for describing statistical data. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary for data comparison, such as 'surpassed', 'accounted for', or 'a significant proportion', and ensure that the subject matter is correctly identified.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include incorrect article usage ('the minimal French speaking habitually city'), subject-verb agreement problems ('Alsatian is seen similar as the Occitan'), and awkward phrasing ('which are chased by the Creole'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. A greater focus on sentence construction and proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy would significantly improve the quality of the writing.

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