Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar charts show the point of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them in childhood in number of thousand and the number of adults who speak a regional language to their own children in number of thousands.

Overall, The chart show the spoke a regional language and their own children spoke a regional language. Alsatian and Occitan are same number on spoken habitually. So low spoken habitually department was a Corsican and Creole. Occitan is high in spoken occasionally or Corsican and Creole on low in spoken occasionally. So regional language to spoke a their own children on Alsatian is high in their and Corsican is low on their.

So, first Alsatian and Occitan is same number in spoken habitually on 600 and Corsican has only 180 adults including in spoken habitually. Creole including 200 adults in spoken habitually. At same stage Occitan is cross the 1m adults at that time Alsatian and Breton has including only 220 and 400 adults. And Corsican has only 100 adults in spoken occasionally.

So, second the who speak a regional language to their own children so Alsatian language most spoke in these department in 400 children and Corsican and Creole children number is 60 and 80. so Occitan language spoke children number is 270.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the charts, but it fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. The data interpretation is inconsistent and often confusing, such as stating 'Alsatian and Occitan are same number' when the charts show distinct differences. The report lacks a clear summary of the main trends, and the figures cited are frequently inaccurate or misaligned with the provided data. The response does not adequately highlight the key features or make meaningful comparisons between the two charts, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. Consequently, the information is presented in a way that is difficult for the reader to follow or verify against the source material.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is severely hampered by poor sentence structure and repetitive, ineffective cohesive devices. The frequent use of 'So' to start sentences is informal and does not create a logical flow. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to determine which data point the writer is referring to. There is no effective use of linking words to contrast or compare the information, and the overall structure feels disjointed, which significantly impedes the reader's ability to follow the argument or the description of the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The writer struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data, often using phrases like 'in number of thousand' or 'at same stage' incorrectly. There is a lack of precision in describing trends or categories, and the word choice is frequently awkward or ungrammatical (e.g., 'low spoken habitually department'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information clearly, and the errors in word choice often cause confusion for the reader, preventing the response from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that make the text difficult to understand. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many sentences being fragments or run-on sentences. Subject-verb agreement is often incorrect (e.g., 'The chart show'), and there is a persistent misuse of prepositions and articles. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always inaccurate, leading to a breakdown in communication. The frequency of these errors is high, and they occur throughout the entire response, which is characteristic of a Band 4 level.

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