Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar charts illustrate the information about the comparison of French adults whose parents spoke in French language to them and the number who speak French to their own child as a parent.
In an overview, it can be see through the given data that Alsatian and Occitan language were most spoken language for both generation. Alsatian and Occitan language were spoked almost in equal amount for regular habit while, Occitan were spoked mainly in occasionally and for new generation, Alsatian is the most spoken language in French.
Moreover, 600 thousand people were used Alsatian and Occitan language for daily communication where in new generation, less people are using Alsatian language as it decreased to 400 thousand. Over 1 million thousand people were use Occitan language occasionally. Similarly, it is the second most spoken language for new generations also. Creole and Corsican language were not crossed 100 thousand people in among generations.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying key trends, such as the prominence of Alsatian and Occitan. However, the analysis is hampered by inaccuracies in data interpretation. For instance, the claim that '1 million thousand' people used Occitan is a significant misreading of the chart scale, and the description of the data is somewhat disjointed. While the main features are highlighted, the lack of precision in reporting the figures and the failure to clearly distinguish between the two charts (parents vs. children) limit the effectiveness of the report. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are accurately transcribed and that the comparison between the two groups is more clearly structured.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organized into three paragraphs, which is a logical structure for an academic report. However, the flow of information is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, the use of 'Moreover' and 'Similarly' is somewhat forced, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the vague mention of 'new generation' without explicitly linking it back to the second chart. While there is a basic attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas lacks the sophistication required for a higher band. Improving the use of cohesive devices would help the reader follow the comparison more smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision needed for a higher score. There are several instances of awkward word choices and grammatical errors related to word form, such as 'spoked' instead of 'spoken' and 'most spoken language for both generation' (should be plural 'generations'). The phrase '1 million thousand' is a significant lexical error that misrepresents the data. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'declined,' 'remained stable,' or 'predominant,' and ensure that numerical data is expressed correctly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'it can be see' (passive voice error), 'people were used' (incorrect tense/voice), and 'language were not crossed' (incorrect verb usage). These errors are noticeable throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from being considered accurate. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice, which is essential for describing charts and graphs.
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