Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart provides information about French adults, Whose parents spoke regional language to them regularly and those who spoke once in a while. And there is also a bar chart that shows who spoke a regional language to their own kids.
Overall, there are total of five languages. However, in the first bar chart the people who spoke regularly in Alsatian and Occitan remained same. Furthermore, the people who spoke Occitan once in a while are more then people who spoke Alsatian. Additionally, those who spoke Alsatian to their own kids are higher than those who spoke Occitan.
The people who spoke frequently Alsatian and Occitan are around 600. Moreover, Breton are approximately 28. Furthermore, Creole is about 200 and Corsican is about 98. The people who spoke sometimes in Alsatian is around 254. Thereafter, Occitan is almost 1.9m. Whereas, Berton is about 400. In contrast, Creole and Corsican is about 100.
Whereas, the people who spoke to their children in their native language in Alsatian is the highest which is about 400. While, in Occitan it is 265. However in Berton it is quite less around 99 and in Creole it is approximately 98. Subsequently, in Corsican it is 78.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the presentation of data is problematic. You have attempted to describe the figures, but there are significant inaccuracies in the data interpretation (e.g., stating '1.9m' for a figure that is likely 1.9 thousand, or misreading the scale). The overview is present but lacks a clear summary of the most significant trends. To improve, ensure you carefully check the units provided in the charts and focus on highlighting the most striking differences or similarities rather than listing every individual data point, which can lead to confusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical and sometimes inappropriate. For example, using 'Thereafter' to introduce a new data point is unnatural. The progression of ideas is occasionally disjointed, particularly in the third paragraph where the transition between languages feels like a list rather than a comparative analysis. Improving the use of linking phrases and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision. You rely heavily on basic structures like 'The people who spoke...'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'remained same' (should be 'remained the same') and 'quite less' (should be 'significantly lower'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'a significant proportion', and ensure you use precise terminology when discussing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
You use a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Creole and Corsican is about 100') and incorrect article usage. Additionally, there are punctuation errors and awkward phrasing throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for basic agreement and ensuring consistent verb tenses would be a beneficial next step.
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