Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar graphs depicts the information about the number of parents who speaks their native language with their children and the number of children whose parents spoke in regional language when they were child. The data has been calibrated in thousands.
Overall, there is a downward pattern followed by those who speak French to their own children when they are adult. Alsatian is the most favourable spoken language used by parents when their children.
Firstly, Corsican ranked least spoken language among spoken habitually category followed by Creole accounted 100 thousands. Secondly, Occitan is more popular occasionally spoken language by parents with their children when they were child just above 1m.
The most popular regional language among families is Alsatian who used to speak with their children up to 400 thousands. There is minor difference notice between Breton and Creole categories. Whereas, Corsican remain least preferable language by the adults with their children.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate overview of the data. The description of the charts is confusing, as the student struggles to distinguish between the two distinct categories (parents speaking to children vs. children speaking to their own children). The data points cited are often imprecise or incorrectly interpreted, such as the mention of '1m' for Occitan, which is not clearly supported by the provided visual information. The report lacks a logical summary of the key trends, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the main differences between the languages mentioned. More careful analysis and clearer reporting of the figures are required to meet higher band descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. While some cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' are used, they do not effectively connect the ideas in a meaningful way. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the internal structure of the paragraphs is often disjointed. The use of pronouns and referencing is sometimes ambiguous, making it difficult to follow which language or category is being discussed at any given time. Improved paragraph structure and more precise linking words would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic descriptors. There are several instances of inaccurate word choice, such as 'calibrated' to describe the data units and 'favourable' to describe language usage, which do not fit the context of a data report. The phrasing 'spoken habitually category' and 'least preferable language' is somewhat unnatural. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends and data, such as 'prevalent', 'declining', or 'significant', and ensure that collocations are used correctly to convey information accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'graphs depicts' and 'parents who speaks'. Sentence structures are often simplistic or incorrectly constructed, such as 'Alsatian is the most favourable spoken language used by parents when their children'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and there are errors in tense usage, such as 'when they were child'. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the writing from reaching a higher band score. A focus on basic grammatical accuracy is essential.
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