Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 6.0)
the bar graph illustrates two distinct topics, covering the number of adults having their parents spoken regional language during young time and its frequency and how many adults communicate with their kids in regional languages, categorized in Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole and Corsican.
Overall, Occitan was the most common used language, compared to Corsican with the lowest data in the charts.
Frequently, Alsatian and Occitan were applied in daily life conversation the most, at nearly similar figure, around 600K for family having those as main languages whilst, the least statistic belongs to Corsican and Creole, at nearly 90 and 100 relatively. Noticeably, Occitan dominated the chart of household speaking regional language sometimes, at around 1.5M, which is 15 times higher than the figure for Corsican, at only sharly 100K.
By contrast, the positions change partially in the number of people talk in regional language to their children with the first position goes to Alsatian (400K) but Corsican remains the lowest figure (around 80K). Comparing the number of people speaking this language to their kids and people have this experience in childhood, the number seems decreasing over time as the highest figure reduce from 1.5M to 4K only.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify key trends, the data interpretation is occasionally inaccurate, such as the claim that the highest figure reduced from 1.5M to 4K, which is not supported by the provided data. Furthermore, the categorization of the languages is somewhat confusingly presented. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points cited are precise and that the comparison between the two charts is clearly structured. The overview is present but could be more effectively synthesized to highlight the most significant differences between the two sets of data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps with readability. However, the logical flow is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, the use of 'Frequently' to start a sentence is not appropriate for describing statistical data. Cohesive devices are used, but they are sometimes repetitive or used in a way that does not clearly link the ideas. Improving the use of referencing and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the overall coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'illustrates', 'categorized', and 'dominated'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and awkward collocations, such as 'young time' instead of 'childhood', 'most common used' instead of 'most commonly used', and 'sharly' (likely a typo for 'sharply'). These errors do not impede communication, but they limit the score. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring correct word forms and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the positions change partially in the number of people talk') and article usage. Some sentences are also structurally awkward, such as 'the first position goes to Alsatian (400K) but Corsican remains the lowest figure'. While these errors rarely impede the reader's understanding, the frequency of these slips prevents a higher score. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy will be beneficial.
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