Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graphs illustrate that the number of adults and whose parents spoke a regional language to their and them in childhood.

"Overall, The most language spoken by parents is Alsatian. Followed by, The parents might more able to spoken Occitan language in spoken habitually. Moreover, The highest language is spoken by parents is Occitan in spoken Occasionally. While, Adults could more able to used Alsatian language.

From to adults' parents, People could used most of Alsatian and Occitan languages at 600 thousands in habitually. In addition, The popular language could most spoken by them is Occitan at 1m thousands in habitually. While, Creole and Corsican were lowest used by people at around 100 thousands in both habitually and occasionally in childhood.

From to adults, Alsatian could most used by adults at 400 thousands, compared with their parents in both habitually and occasionally. Additionally, A moderate amount of language is used by their own at just 250 thousands. Subsequently, Adults could less capable to spoke Creole and Corsican languages at just around 60 to 80 thousands in childhood.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by describing the provided charts. However, the information is presented in a fragmented and often inaccurate manner. The data points mentioned, such as '600 thousands' or '1m thousands', do not clearly align with the visual data provided, and the distinction between the two charts (parents' usage vs. adults' usage) is poorly articulated. The overview is confusing and fails to highlight the key trends or significant differences between the categories. The response lacks a clear summary of the main features, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. Consequently, the information is not fully developed or accurately reported.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is severely hampered by poor sentence structure and confusing transitions. Phrases like 'From to adults' parents' and 'Subsequently' are used incorrectly, making the flow of information disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas effectively, and the referencing is often unclear, leaving the reader struggling to follow the comparison between the two charts. The overall arrangement is mechanical and fails to guide the reader through the data in a logical, coherent way.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The range of vocabulary is very limited and often used incorrectly. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'more able to spoken' instead of 'more likely to speak' and 'less capable to spoke'. The student relies on repetitive phrasing and struggles to use precise terminology to describe the data (e.g., 'the most language spoken' instead of 'the most common language'). These errors are frequent and often impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that distort the meaning. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many sentences being ungrammatical (e.g., 'The graphs illustrate that the number of adults and whose parents spoke...'). Subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and word order are consistently problematic. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are almost always faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. The high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read and understand.

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