Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graphs illustrate the number of French citizens whose parents talked a French regional language to them when they were little and wheather they communicate in French regional language to their own children.
Overall, Occitan was the most spoken language used by their parents in both habitually and occasionally, while Corsican and Creleo were least popular. Additionally, Alsatian was the most used language by them to their own children.
Regarding the regional language spoke by their parents, Occitan constitute the majority, making up about 620 thousands people in spoken habitually and just below 1 million in spoken occasionally. In spoken habitually, the alsatian form the second largest language used with 600 thousands people, followed by Breton (250), Creole (100), and Corsican (90). Spoken occasionally, followed a similar pattern, with the only different is in the position of the second and third posistion get swapped.
Turning to the regional language used to their own children, Alsatian surpass Ocitan to become the most popular language used with about 400 thousands people, followed by Occitan (250), Breton (90), Creole (80), and Corsica (60).
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends and comparing the two charts. You successfully highlighted the shift in popularity between languages, such as how Alsatian became the most spoken language when addressing one's own children. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting. For instance, stating 'about 620 thousands' is awkward; it should be '620,000'. Additionally, the comparison of the two charts is somewhat superficial. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed and that the overview provides a more comprehensive summary of the key differences between the two sets of data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Regarding', 'Turning to', and 'Additionally' helps guide the reader through the information. However, some transitions are mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'the only different is in the position of the second and third posistion get swapped'. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the overall coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'habitually', 'occasionally', and 'surpass'. However, there are several inaccuracies in word choice and spelling, such as 'wheather' (whether), 'Creleo' (Creole), and 'posistion' (position). The phrasing 'talked a French regional language to them' is slightly unnatural; 'spoke a regional language to them' would be more precise. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that technical terms are spelled correctly throughout the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'Occitan constitute the majority' (should be 'constitutes'), 'regional language spoke' (should be 'spoken'), and 'the only different is' (should be 'difference'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do indicate a lack of control over subject-verb agreement and word forms. Increasing the variety of error-free complex structures and proofreading for basic grammatical slips would significantly improve your score in this criterion.
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