Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts depict the information about the French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language ( Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole, and Corsican) to them in their childhood while some spoke a French regional language self.
In the first chart, there were two kinds of regional, one was spoke habitually and the other was occasionally. Occitan had been the most popular language which was spoken occasionally by the parents to their adults. ( number of adults in thousand around at 1m) whereas the same language was used habitually by the parents to them and number of adult was (600,000). In contrast, the regional languages Breton, Creole, and Corsican used by parents habitually to adults in their childhood was below 200,000, 100,000, 900,000 respectively and furthermore, these languages had been used occasionally by parents, the figure of adults number was 400, 100, 100 in thousand respectively.
On the other hand, 400,000 adults spoke the Alsatian language which was the highest among the five language.
The number of adults, which was 250, 100, 800, and 700 (in thousand) used the languages Occitan, Breton, Creole, and Corsican in their childhood to their own.
Overall, the used of the Alsatian language had been highest by the adults to their own in their childhood, while Alsatian and Occitan both had been used on same level by habitually whereas occasionally, Occitan was at the peak point.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe the data but fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, and the data points are often confusing or incorrectly stated (e.g., '900,000' for Breton, which is not supported by the charts). The report lacks a coherent summary of the main trends, and the distinction between the two charts is poorly articulated. The data is presented in a way that is difficult to follow, and the lack of precision in reporting the figures significantly hinders the reader's understanding of the information provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. Cohesive devices are used, but often incorrectly or in a repetitive way (e.g., 'In the first chart', 'On the other hand', 'Overall'). The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to determine which data point the student is referring to. The transition between the two charts is abrupt, and the lack of clear signposting makes the overall structure feel disjointed and difficult to navigate.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'the figure of adults number was' and 'used the languages... to their own' are awkward and demonstrate a lack of control over collocation. There is a reliance on basic vocabulary, and the attempt to use more specific terms is hampered by grammatical errors and imprecise word choice. The repetition of 'number of adults' and 'regional language' suggests a restricted vocabulary range that struggles to convey the data effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the used of the Alsatian language had been highest'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of parentheses and commas. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. The majority of sentences contain errors, which prevents the writing from reaching a higher band score.
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