Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates french adults who’s parents communicated in regional language with them and the second chart shows the adults who also spoke it to there children.

Overall, a very high number of parent’s spoke it to their children but very few passed it down to their generation.

One of most spoken regional language was Alsatian it was spoken both out of habit and at occasions but frequently it was habitually. Breton was also a very well known language, around 400k parents spoke it to their children. Comparing it with one million of Alsatian it is a smaller number but still very widely spoken.

The native tongue spoken by most people was Occitian which hang around a whooping 1.1 million occasionally and 600k habitually.

There were other note able languages like creole and Corsican but they howard around 100k.

The adults could not really pass these languages down there bloodline. Where as alsatian and occitian were still had a good range other languages could not pass down generations that well

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task but lacks precision in data reporting. While you identify the main trends, the figures provided are often inaccurate or poorly contextualized. For instance, you mention '1.1 million' for Occitan, but the charts require a more careful breakdown of the two categories (habitual vs. occasional). Furthermore, the report fails to clearly distinguish between the two charts—the number of adults whose parents spoke the language versus the number who speak it to their own children. The analysis is somewhat superficial, and the lack of a clear comparison between the two datasets makes it difficult for the reader to grasp the overall trend of language decline across generations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical. For example, the phrase 'Comparing it with one million of Alsatian' is awkward and lacks a clear link to the previous sentence. The referencing is also inconsistent, making it difficult to follow the comparison between the different languages. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks the necessary signposting to guide the reader through the data effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of informal or imprecise language, such as 'whooping', 'howard' (likely a misspelling of 'hovered'), and 'note able'. Additionally, there are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'french' (should be capitalized), 'there' instead of 'their', and 'Occitian' (spelling error). While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the errors in spelling and collocation are noticeable and occasionally distract from the clarity of the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical control is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in punctuation and grammar, such as 'french adults who’s parents' (should be 'whose'), 'parent’s spoke' (incorrect apostrophe), and 'Where as alsatian and occitian were still had a good range'. These errors, particularly the misuse of apostrophes and subject-verb agreement, occur frequently. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy.

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