Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrates the number of young people whose parents speak french from young age and adults member teach french language to their own child. Overall, it is evident...

The alsatian language valued higher in habitually while, in occasionally the value almost 200 thousand. The Occitan and Alsatian figured almost same in habitually on the other hand, Creole and Corsican had lowest number of adults whose parents spoke regional language.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum, which severely limits the ability to address the task requirements. Because the response is only 71 words, it fails to provide a comprehensive overview or a detailed comparison of the data provided in the charts. The description of the trends is fragmented and lacks the necessary depth to meet the criteria for a higher band. To improve, you must ensure you describe all key features, provide supporting data, and meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a full development of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks a clear logical progression. While there is a brief attempt at an introduction, the body paragraph is disjointed and fails to connect the information effectively. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and sometimes misused, such as the phrase 'in habitually' which does not function as a clear transition. The paragraphing is also problematic due to the premature ending of the text. To improve, focus on using clear linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and follows a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and contains several inaccuracies. Phrases like 'adults member teach' and 'figured almost same' are grammatically and lexically awkward, hindering the clarity of the report. There is a lack of precise terminology to describe statistical trends (e.g., 'valued higher' is not the correct way to describe a bar chart). To improve, you should learn collocations related to data description, such as 'the figure for X was higher than Y' or 'X experienced a significant increase'. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and adverbs will also help.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Examples include 'whose parents speak french from young age' (missing articles and awkward phrasing) and 'the Alsatian language valued higher' (incorrect verb usage). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the existing sentences are often fragmented or poorly constructed. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct article usage. Once you have mastered these, work on incorporating complex sentences using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to improve your range.

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