Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The chart below deplics the number of french adults whose parents spoke regional national language to them when they were kids and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Overall, in first chart , in both categories occitan dominate the chart, in second chart the maximum numbers contain by Alsatian.

It is crystal clear from the chart, the language Alsatian spoken by majority in habitch is 600, but in occasionally these numbers are less than 400. Breton, the next language hold more than 300 of spoken in habitually, in occasionally these are 400. Additionally, 200 adults spoke creole in habitually, although, in occasionally these numbers are increases slightly from 200 to 210. The last evidence is about corsican, in it these

are less than 200 spokers in habitually, moreover, too often in hundreds in occasionally.

Remaining data shows that, in next chest 400 of parents spoke conversate with their children in Alsatian. Occiatan are spoken by more than 200 parents. Moreover, less than 100 parents use Breton language with their own kids, Geek also contain less users which are nearly 80. The Corsican is the language spoken by 60 parents.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe the data, but it fails to accurately represent the information provided in the charts. There are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting, such as misinterpreting the labels and figures (e.g., confusing 'Occitan' and 'Alsatian' trends). The overview is vague and does not clearly highlight the main trends or significant differences between the two charts. The report lacks a clear analytical focus, and the information is presented in a disjointed manner that makes it difficult for the reader to grasp the overall picture of the regional language usage. To improve, ensure you carefully verify the data points and group them logically to show clear comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The transition between the two charts is abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'The last evidence is about' or 'Remaining data shows that, in next chest'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow the comparison between the two sets of data. While there is an attempt to use linking words, they are often placed awkwardly, which disrupts the flow of the report. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring a smoother transition between ideas would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'deplics' (depicts), 'in habitch' (inhabitants), 'spokers' (speakers), and 'conversate' (converse). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data with precision. There is also confusion in terminology, such as referring to the charts as 'chests'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more accurate terminology for describing data, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for', and ensure that you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling and word-form errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies on a limited range of grammatical structures, and there are frequent errors in sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and tense usage. For example, 'the maximum numbers contain by Alsatian' should be 'the maximum number is contained by Alsatian', and 'these numbers are increases' is grammatically incorrect. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which occasionally impedes the clarity of the message. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence structure and ensuring correct verb forms will help improve your accuracy.

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