Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given line graphs illustrate the numerous data about French adults who were able to speek a French regional lamguage to their parents when younger and the number also spoke the same language to their offspring.

Overall, it can be observed that the number off adults whose parents speaks occationally in Occitan is the highest; while, In corsican had the lowest spoken habitually. Moreover, Asiatian held the highest number of adullts who speak a regional language to their own children.

To commence with, Creole and Corsican held the least spoken both habitually and occasionally to adults in the childhood with less than [redacted phone]. However, Occitian was the most spoken occasionally with approximately 1.5 million, while Alsiatian and Occitan was highest spoken by almost about [redacted phone].

Additionally, the number of adults who also speaks a regional languages to their own children had both considerably lower in Breton, Creola and Corsican who were almost and less than [redacted phone]. Furthermore, Alsatian have the highest of [redacted phone].

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to describe the charts depicting French regional languages, but the response suffers from significant inaccuracies regarding data representation. For instance, the text claims Occitan was 'approximately 1.5 million' for occasional speakers, whereas the chart shows around 1.065 million. Furthermore, the description misinterprets the relationship between generations, confusing parents speaking to children with children speaking to parents in the introduction ('adults who were able to speek a French regional lamguage to their parents'). An overview is attempted in the second paragraph, but it is marred by grammatical errors and imprecise reporting. The response addresses parts of the task, but the data misinterpretations and lack of clear comparative synthesis restrict it to a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is structured into four paragraphs, attempting an introductory statement, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor cohesive devices and confusing referencing. Transition phrases like 'To commence with' and 'Additionally' are used awkwardly. Paragraphing is present, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak. For example, sentences such as 'Occitian was the most spoken occasionally with approximately 1.5 million, while Alsiatian and Occitan was highest spoken by almost about 600 000' lack logical linkage and fail to guide the reader smoothly through the comparative data. Overall coherence is hindered by these mechanical and faulty links, placing it at a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include spelling errors like 'speek', 'lamguage', 'off' instead of 'of', 'occationally', 'Asiatian' instead of 'Alsatian', 'adullts', and 'Alsiatian'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary ('habitually', 'offspring', 'considerably'), but misuse is frequent ('adults who were able to speek... to their parents when younger'). The limited control over word formation and spelling errors throughout the essay restricts the lexical score to a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on the attempt at topic-specific vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures frequently result in serious errors. There are numerous subject-verb agreement errors, such as 'the number off adults whose parents speaks' and 'Alsatian have the highest'. Tense and voice confusion also occur frequently, as seen in 'Creole and Corsican held the least spoken both habitually and occasionally to adults in the childhood'. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are flawed, causing strain for the reader. Due to the high frequency of grammatical errors and limited structural range, this criterion warrants a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.

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