Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This bar graph show the comparison between number of adult parents who speak french language from their childhood and the number of parent speak french to their kids

firstly, the asiatian and secondly, the occitain also have spoken habitually same number of the people who speak french as their regional language not more then million,

thirdly breton it started showing the sign of declining and then trend is continuously going downward till creolo while is liitlle less than breton corsican is the lowest

On the other hand the Aisatian is around 400 thousand and occitan is slighlty more than 200 breton is less 200 thousand and around 100 thousand creole has more tehn corsican come second at the down of having very less breton and here last but not least corsican comes first for being at the bottom that is nearly 60.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping at 142 words, which negatively impacts Task Achievement. Furthermore, the content struggles to accurately reflect the visual data. The student misinterprets the regional languages as 'french language' and confuses the data between habitual speaking, occasional speaking, and speaking to one's own children. The overview is absent, and the description of data points is disjointed and imprecise (e.g., 'asiatian', 'occitain', 'creolo'). Key trends are not systematically selected or compared, leading to a fragmented and partially inaccurate overview of the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organisational structure is very weak. The text is divided into poorly formulated paragraphs that lack logical sequencing and clear progression. While the student attempts transitional markers such as 'firstly', 'thirdly', and 'On the other hand', these devices are used mechanically and inaccurately without guiding the reader properly through the data. Paragraphing is inappropriate, with run-on sentences and a lack of clear separation between different parts of the visual information. Referencing between sentences is unclear, making the overall arrangement difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The lexical range is extremely limited and inadequate for an academic report. The student uses basic vocabulary with numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'asiatian' for Alsatian, 'occitain' for Occitan, 'creolo' for Creole, and 'Aisatian' for Alsatian. Terms like 'habitually' and 'occasionally' from the prompt are either omitted or misunderstood, and the writer incorrectly refers to regional languages as 'french'. There are frequent errors in word form and choice that strain the reader and impede comprehension.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is severely restricted. The response consists largely of fragmented, poorly constructed sentences lacking proper subjects, verbs, or punctuation (e.g., lowercase beginnings and missing full stops). There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('number of adult parents who speak', 'parent speak') and malformed comparative structures. Complex sentence forms are attempted but are heavily flawed, resulting in sentences that frequently obscure meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader.

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