Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The charts below describes the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French provincial language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French provincial lamguage to thier own children.
In this graph the adults parents spoken french language to children in childhood is higher then to adults who speak a regional language.Number of adults whose parents spoke a regional language alsatian and occitan is spkoe more widely in habitually. In occasionally occitan is spoke more then breton and alsation.
According to timeline graph number of adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood Alsatian and occitan is more widely spoken habitually as compared to Breton, Creole,Corsican. In occasinally languages occitan is more widly spoken.Corsican is less widely spoken.
Number of adults who speak a regional language to thier own childern,Aisation is more widely spoken and corsican is less widely spkoen in own childhood.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by mentioning various regional languages such as Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole, and Corsican. However, the data interpretation is weak, confused, and contains inaccuracies when compared to the visual data (for instance, misinterpreting the comparison between habitual and occasional speakers, and stating that Corsican is less widely spoken in 'own childhood' rather than to own children). Furthermore, the response lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends. The description consists of disjointed sentences that do not fully cover all aspects of the charts in an organized manner. This places the response in Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text suffers from a lack of clear overall progression and logical paragraphing. Sentences are broken into choppy, repetitive blocks without adequate cohesive devices. Phrases like 'In this graph' and 'According to timeline graph' do not successfully link ideas, and the referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the progression of information. Paragraphs are poorly constructed, with single-sentence blocks that do not group related data effectively. These organizational flaws align with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors ('lamguage', 'thier', 'spkoe', 'occinally', 'widly', 'childern', 'Aisation'). The student relies heavily on basic vocabulary and struggles with precise word choice and collocations, such as 'spkoe more widely in habitually' and 'In occasinally languages'. While the terms 'regional language', 'adults', and 'children' are used appropriately to the topic, the numerous lexical and spelling errors impede communication at times. This performance is characteristic of Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is very weak throughout the response. There is a limited range of structures attempted, and simple subject-verb agreement and tense errors are pervasive, such as 'The charts below describes', 'adults parents spoken french language... is higher then', and 'Alsatian and occitan is more widely spoken'. Complex structures are rarely attempted and, when used, are inaccurate. Punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after commas and periods, are also frequent. This warrants a Band 4.0 score.
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