Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar graph illustrates the figure for french adolescents whose parrents tended to speak french regional language during their own childhood, while the accompanying other bar graph demonstrates the number of parents who speak currently a french to thier own offsprings, currently. measured in thousands.

Overall, Meanwhile, occitan accounted for the most preferrable lingua, whether it is spoken habitually or occasionally. By contrast, corsican constituted the least number of french spekers. While, in the contemporary world, alsatian has become the lingua france among french parents.

To begin with regarding the number of children, who heard french languages consistently during their adolescense. Alsatian and occitan comprised the highest speakers, with similar number of 600 and just above 600 respectively. Followed by this, breton represented the

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at 125 words and trailing off mid-sentence ("breton represented the..."). While the student attempts to provide an overview and identifies some main features such as Occitan and Alsatian, the incomplete nature of the response severely limits task completion. Furthermore, the second body paragraph is cut off before presenting any actual data from the second chart regarding the number of adults who speak a regional language to their own children. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a low band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay attempts a standard structure with an introduction and an overview paragraph, utilizing cohesive phrases such as "Overall, Meanwhile" and "By contrast". However, the logical progression breaks down immediately due to the abrupt ending of the text. Paragraphing is attempted, but the second paragraph remains undeveloped and incomplete. Referencing is occasionally confusing, such as "the accompanying other bar graph demonstrates the number of parents who speak currently a french to thier own offsprings, currently". Because the text trails off mid-thought, overall coherence is heavily compromised.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and contains numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as "parrents", "thier", "offsprings", and "lingua france". The student attempts some less common vocabulary items like "habitually", "occasionally", and "adolescence", but these are undermined by frequent inaccuracies. Repetition of words like "currently" and incorrect collocations ("speak currently a french") restrict the lexical range and create noticeable difficulties for the reader, aligning with Band 5 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control is weak. There are noticeable grammatical errors throughout, including tense and word order issues such as "who speak currently a french to thier own offsprings, currently". Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic (e.g., lowercase "french", "occitan", "alsatian"). Because the response ends abruptly in the middle of a sentence, grammatical range cannot be fully demonstrated beyond basic and flawed complex attempts.

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