Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The charts below illustrates the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French reginol language and then people who actually speak French reginol language to their own children.
Overall, there are five types of reginol language and most of parents and adults are habitual to speak the two major language Aisatian and Occitan, whereas Breton stands in middle rangle but Creole and Corsican were the most least spoken language amongst parents and adults.
Parents were more freuently used the language Aisatian and Occitan with a stable range of 600 thousands, but occasionally they prefer more Occitan than Aisatian
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 99 words against the required minimum of 150 words. Because of this, it fails to cover all parts of the task adequately. While the writer attempts to identify some general trends, such as mentioning Alsatian and Occitan as major languages, key data points are missing or poorly articulated, and the second chart regarding transmission to children is barely touched upon. The lack of a fully developed overview and insufficient detail results in a low band score under Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text is divided into three very short paragraphs, attempting an introduction and an overall summary, but it breaks off mid-thought. Cohesive devices are minimal and basic, using words like 'Overall' and 'whereas'. Logical progression is interrupted because the text is incomplete and abruptly ends after the third paragraph. Paragraphing is attempted but lacks the structure required for a fully developed academic report.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is repetitive and contains several spelling errors, such as 'reginol' for regional, 'Aisatian' for Alsatian, 'rangle' for range, and 'freuently' for frequently. There are also unnatural collocations like 'habitual to speak' and 'most least spoken'. The lexical range is very limited and barely adequate for the task, with frequent slips that indicate basic control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures contain noticeable errors, such as 'The charts below illustrates' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'parents and adults are habitual to speak'. Punctuation is generally basic. Frequent structural and grammatical errors occur throughout the short text.
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