Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the bar charts illustrate the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Overall, it can be seen that Occitan language take advance in languages who spoked habitually and occasionally by parents to their adults, meanwhile the Alsatian is the number one language where adults speak a regional language to their children.
For the regional spoken habitually language the around 600 thousand adults was spoked to them with Alsatian meanwhile the Occitan was spoked further with 30 thousand adults. Also, there are the Breton
language who was spoked to near 300 thousand adults. Furthermore, there 2 regional language who was spoked Lesly than the others language who they are Creole and Corsican with number of adults who was spoken to them with this language 100 and 180 thousand successively.
in the other hand for the regionally spoken occasionally we can see that the Occitan language is the most used language with 1.1 millions adult .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by describing the data presented in the charts regarding French regional languages. However, the response is incomplete and falls short of fully presenting an overview or covering all data categories comprehensively. For instance, the discussion of languages spoken to children (the second chart) is abandoned midway through, and the data points chosen contain inaccuracies, such as stating that Occitan was 'spoked further with 30 thousand adults' when the actual chart figures show a larger gap between habitual and occasional speakers, and misreporting Creole and Corsican figures. There is an overview attempted in the second paragraph, but overall the development of ideas is limited and mechanical. This performance aligns best with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The introduction merely paraphrases the prompt, and the overview contains awkward phrasing ('take advance in languages') that obscures the main trends. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'in the other hand', which is a misuse of transition markers. Referencing and linking between sentences feel mechanical rather than natural. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion within paragraphs lacks clarity, particularly in the third paragraph where multiple languages and figures are clustered confusingly without smooth transitions. This fits the Band 5 descriptor for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary with frequent word-choice and word-formation errors. Examples include 'take advance' instead of 'take precedence' or 'lead', 'spoked' instead of 'spoken', and 'Lesly' instead of 'less'. Spelling and morphological issues are prominent throughout the text (e.g., 'successively' used incorrectly for 'respectively'). While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic concepts about numbers and languages, the noticeable errors and lack of precision prevent the score from reaching Band 6. This performance is characteristic of Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, relying heavily on simple constructions and passive voice attempts that are executed incorrectly. There are frequent, persistent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'the around 600 thousand adults was spoked to them' and 'there 2 regional language who was spoked Lesly than the others language who they are Creole and Corsican'. These errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and impede comprehension in several places. Complex structures are attempted but are almost entirely faulty. This matches the criteria for Band 4.
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