Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the bar charts illustrate 3 type of practise in 5 language and there spoken proportion to their own children.

overall,spoken habitually and occasionally occitan has the most number in both sector and corsican has the lowest percentage.including alsatian has the most proportion to talk with their children in native language.

at the beginning alsatian has great number in habitually but occasionally the number decreased from 600 to just over 200 respectively.on the other hand occitan spoken has the most proportion in every spoken and it increased just over 600 to just below 1.2m.and other 3 language rose from habitually to occasionally.

on the other hand, adults who speak native language to their own children in this sector alsatian language has most number than any other language in the list and the number is 400 .nevertheless occitan has second place which has the percentage of just below 300.and other 3 language has sequence such as before going down in row.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover all parts of the visual data by mentioning the different languages (Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole, Corsican) and the categories of speaking habits and transmission to children. However, the data handling is confused and inaccurate in several places. For instance, the student states that 'occitan has the most number in both sector and corsican has the lowest percentage.including alsatian has the most proportion to talk with their children', which misinterprets parts of the chart (Alsatian actually has the highest number for intergenerational transmission to children at 400 thousand, whereas Occitan is highest in habitual and occasional speaking). Furthermore, data points are misread or unclearly expressed, such as 'decreased from 600 to just over 200 respectively'. Overall, ideas are underdeveloped and lack accurate support from the charts, placing this performance in the Band 5 range.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into short paragraphs attempting an introduction, overview, and body sections, which provides a basic structural framework. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by poor referencing, punctuation errors, and a lack of clear cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences and paragraphs feel abrupt and mechanical (e.g., 'at the beginning', 'on the other hand'). Pronoun referencing and logical links are weak, making it difficult to follow the relationships between the data sets. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is faulty. This aligns with the Band 5 descriptor for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical range is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic vocabulary such as 'number', 'proportion', 'speak', 'language', and 'sector'. There are noticeable lexical inaccuracies and awkward word choices, such as '3 type of practise', 'talk with their children in native language', and 'has sequence such as before going down in row'. Spelling and word formation errors are present, though meaning can usually be deciphered. The vocabulary is minimally adequate to communicate simple ideas about the chart, but lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands, reflecting a Band 5 score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex structures are either absent or grammatically flawed. There are pervasive punctuation and capitalisation errors throughout the text (e.g., lowercase letters at the beginning of sentences like 'the bar charts', 'overall,spoken', and missing spaces after commas and periods). Frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('there spoken proportion', 'occitan spoken has', 'other 3 language has'), hinder readability. This demonstrates control characteristic of Band 4.

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