Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given charts illustrates the amount french adults whose parents use a French regional language to them in their childhood and the amount of parents who use a French regional language to their own kids.

Large number of parents used alsatian and occitan for speaking with their children, whereas, some used Breton, creole, and corsican as well. In turned out, The children, later, used the similar languages to speak with their own kids which their parents used to speak with them.

Around 600 parents used Alsatian for speaking with their children habitually, the similar pattern could be seen later with their own kids where 400 parents used the same regional language while speaking with their children. Occasionally, 1m parents were using occitan for communicating, however, later the number decreased to around only 250 adults.

Overall, mostly Alsatian and Occitan were the most

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe the main features of the charts, noting the prominence of Alsatian and Occitan alongside other regional languages, and provides some specific data points such as the 600 figure for Alsatian and the 1m figure for Occitan. However, the report is severely incomplete. The length check indicates the response contains only 142 words, falling short of the 150-word minimum, which leads to a direct penalty in Task Achievement. Furthermore, the final paragraph breaks off mid-sentence ('Overall, mostly Alsatian and Occitan were the most'), meaning an overview is not properly provided and key comparisons across the charts are underdeveloped. To improve, ensure all parts of the visual data are fully contrasted and the required word count is comfortably met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall organizational structure is compromised by the abrupt ending of the text. While the writer attempts to use basic cohesive markers such as 'whereas' and 'however', the progression of ideas becomes disjointed in the final paragraph due to the incomplete sentence. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'which their parents used to speak with them', and paragraphing is inadequate because the conclusion is cut off mid-thought. To achieve a higher band, the text needs a clear introduction, well-developed body paragraphs with consistent logical links, and a complete concluding overview.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, relying on terms like 'amount', 'parents', 'children', and 'languages'. There are several vocabulary and collocation inaccuracies, such as 'amount french adults' instead of 'number of French adults', and uncapitalised proper adjectives and nouns like 'french', 'alsatian', 'occitan', 'breton', 'creole', and 'corsican'. The range of vocabulary is limited to minimally adequate for describing simple data trends, and attempts at less common phrasing are hindered by mechanical errors and word choice issues. To improve, the student should incorporate a wider variety of precise reporting verbs, nouns, and adjectives, and pay close attention to capitalization rules.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical structures attempted include a mix of simple and complex sentences, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are basic errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'The given charts illustrates' instead of 'illustrate', and missing articles in phrases like 'Large number of parents'. Tense usage shows some confusion, as seen in 'It turned out, The children, later, used the similar languages', where punctuation is also misused before capital letters. Complex structures are frequently faulty or awkward, and punctuation errors are noticeable throughout the text. To raise this score, the student needs to ensure tighter control over basic agreement, punctuation, and tense consistency.

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